Looking down petrifies me. I feel a knot rising from my stomach, sticking inside my throat. Oh my God, I’m going to retch. Fear seizes me. My head is spinning and I’m gasping for breath as the color slowly drains from my face. I look at Robert and he understands immediately I am descending into a full blown panic attack. Grabbing the railing for my dear life, my PTSD clicks in and I fall to the floor of the bridge with unrestrained sobbing.
My patient husband picks me up and holds me close while my mind spins through a chaotic mess of frightening images.
Breathe in…. one… two… three… hold….hold…. release.
With my husband still holding me, he calmly tells me, “Honey, we are on the other side now.” My breathing returns to normal. I release a huge sigh of relief.
“But, we need to go back for our car.”
(150)
Thank you to Etol Bagam for our photo prompt this week.
This is my submission for Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers Challenge. It’s a fun challenge that welcomes all who want to participate. We are given a photo prompt and approximately 100-175 words with which we use to write our stories. If you would like more information, please click here.
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I love this. Such a good end but I particularly like how you conjure up the terror of heights with your description. 🙂
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Thanks TJ! I accidentally published it under the challenge blog, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers! LOL! I about died when I realized that. Thank you so much for the feedback. 🙂
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Excellent take Joy you have caught the fear so vividly. Well done.I hope you are better on the return leg….
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Thanks Michael! I accidentally published under the challenge blog. Ooops!! I appreciate your comment.
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Excellent description !
The last sentence made me to laugh 🙂
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I like the intensity of the emotion and the twist of that last line- sort of darkly humorous.
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Yes, it is. Thank you very much!
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Good job.
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Thank you!
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I remember once free climbing about sixty feet up with someone who went full panic attack once they got to the top. You’re right on the description. Poor guy has to go through this again.
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Oh no, that poor guy! That must have been a terrible experience for him. Yes, this woman has to go through all that panic and terror again to get to their car. Poor thing. I think that fear of heights would be terrible to have.
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There are many things worse. You can avoid edges and cliffs. But one your in panic mode, it’s like rescuing a person drowning
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I can only imagine that it would be. How horrible it must be.
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Great story to go with the picture. I was taken aback at how tiny the humans and bridge were compared to the height. Yup, good place to have a fear of heights breakdown, I’d say! Good for wifey for making that first step onto the bridge. It must have taken all the courage she had to even try. Wonderful story.
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I know, the people look like little dots. I thought it looked awfully high up there! LOL! Thank you for the wonderful comment.
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Kind of sums up for me how other people’s husbands are funny but your own is infuriating – or perhaps I’m alone in that sentiment? A well-written story – I enjoyed it.
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Thank you so much! I appreciate your kind comment.
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Really great job getting into the emotion and making the reader feel what your character feels. I enjoyed it.
On another note, I’m having problems with the link tool. My entry can be found here, though: http://russelljfellows.com/2015/07/31/the-journey-ahead/ Thanks!
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Thank you so much for reading and for the comment! I am going to see if I can link it up for you.
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I just added your story to the InLinkz grid! 🙂 I am going to go read it now. 🙂
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A knot in the stomach and a queasy feeling are sure signs of terror ~ A very realistic description PJ ~ Good writing. 🙂
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Thank you John! I appreciate your kind comment!
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Great description of terrifying panic! It’s wonderful that she has such an understanding husband. Too bad she has to go back to get to the car! I wonder if a blindfold would help?
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Thank you Jessie! Yes, probably a blindfold and some Valium. LOL
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I really do appreciate your comment. It isn’t going to be easy to get her back across the bridge.
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